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My *Short* Film! - cuddletime - Nov 30, 2011
Enjoy!
This is not spam! I really did write, direct, and somewhat star in this film!
Any and all complements and criticisms are welcome!
Link:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bl_I7Te9QMY
Dont forget to Like/Subscribe!
My *Short* Film! - Sleekgiant - Nov 30, 2011
Don't quit your day job, thats for sure
My *Short* Film! - cuddletime - Nov 30, 2011
Im a student, granted not a film student, but there wasnt any criticism there at all. Thank you for the semi-pointless comment.
My *Short* Film! - TheDopp - Nov 30, 2011
Negatives (not mentioning acting, because it's a student film, though Red and Yellow were fun):
-Intro/outro audio needs to be mixed down, static everywhere.
-Everyone needed to relax, and not act like they were relaxed (voice overs especially)
-Writing needed work, specifically on the terminology.
-Seven Up/Sprite? needs more scotch/beer.
Positives:
-Camerawork was great
-Premise was fun
-Random facestab
My *Short* Film! - cuddletime - Nov 30, 2011
TheDopp Wrote:Negatives (not mentioning acting, because it's a student film, though Red and Yellow were fun):Thank you for some serious feedback!
-Intro/outro audio needs to be mixed down, static everywhere.
-Everyone needed to relax, and not act like they were relaxed (voice overs especially)
-Writing needed work, specifically on the terminology.
-Seven Up/Sprite? needs more scotch/beer.
Positives:
-Camerawork was great
-Premise was fun
-Random facestab
1. Alcohol wasnt really a posibility. (we are under 21)
2. Voice overs were rushed to say the least.
Thanks!
My *Short* Film! - TheDopp - Nov 30, 2011
Rootbeer sir. Or Applejuice. Something to give the illusion.
My *Short* Film! - cuddletime - Nov 30, 2011
TheDopp Wrote:Rootbeer sir. Or Applejuice. Something to give the illusion.
True, Alka seltzer wouldnt have worked as well as it had.
Thanks for the tip!
My *Short* Film! - Sleekgiant - Dec 01, 2011
cuddletime Wrote:Im a student, granted not a film student, but there wasnt any criticism there at all. Thank you for the semi-pointless comment.Want the truth
-terrible camera quality
-shit audio capture
-acting was average at best
-lighting is off for a poker scene(how many "dark" movies have poker games in brightly lit rooms)
-was so boooooring
Only good thing was the intro that you didn't make, so I stand behind what I originally said, don't quit your day job.
My *Short* Film! - cuddletime - Dec 01, 2011
Sleekgiant Wrote:cuddletime Wrote:Im a student, granted not a film student, but there wasnt any criticism there at all. Thank you for the semi-pointless comment.Want the truth
-terrible camera quality
-shit audio capture
-acting was average at best
-lighting is off for a poker scene(how many "dark" movies have poker games in brightly lit rooms)
-was so boooooring
Only good thing was the intro that you didn't make, so I stand behind what I originally said, don't quit your day job.
Who Jarateed in your cornflakes?
My *Short* Film! - ted - Dec 01, 2011
Nice job , can you tell me the song at the intro (dystopia films part)